Can I change? (thoughts and improvements, thnx)?

I like it very much. The only think that I might change is the "I am in a struggle" section. Everywhere else you have used words to illuminate the sentence...explaining WHY. I think you should explain those thoughts, actions and words with more descriptive terms. For example-- you say you are emotional and then give examples of emotional feelings. You say you are discernible and give examples of how you are discernible. So, if you are in a struggle --describe more how you are struggling. What kind of thoughts, actions, and words.